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Plume: 01002 by handmade-crown Plume: 01002 by handmade-crown
Mm hmm.
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92KICKSTART Aug 18, 2012  Student General Artist
awesome page love the bullets falling out of the gun =D
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:iconvendettahex33:
The dialogue is very interesting. Hmm. I wonder what is up with these two characters. I like their names, by the way. Vesper keeps reminding me of James Bond's Vesper, except I actually like this one.
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BlueFoxJutsu Jul 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the dialogue on this page <3. Probably because revenge is such an interesting topic to me.
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:iconjinxel:
Wait wait wait, I'm a bit confused here. Clarify for me: is this a new, revamped version of Plume? Or just some old, first draft-type pages that you've cleaned up to include in your upcoming prints? Because, I hate to say it, I really do, but I personally hope it's the latter. Mmhm.

Also, if Vesper was told never to take off the Amulet of Auru by her father, then why is it not hanging around her neck in the opening pages? I may have missed it or something, so if I did, feel free to smack me across the face and point it out to me, 'cause I'm not seein' it.
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:iconhandmade-crown:
Revamped. You liked the old version better then? As in the style/color or the dialogue/flow? Or both?

I just wanted to go for a more finished look, more professional. I am quite satisfied with this version.

As for the Amulet, it's in her leather fanny pack. For reasons to be revealed.
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:iconjinxel:
Both really, but there's more to it than that. It's that there are quite a few things that...throw me off, in a sense. The mood between the two for example, can be compared to, oh, lemonade and black coffee. The first version, like lemonade, was brighter, not just from the colors, but because Vesper was smiling more, even when sitting on a pile of dead bodies (the tang to proverbial lemonade). On the other hand, this version is more bitter, more deep, laced with textures, darker tones, and less light...Yet, still enjoyable, like coffee.

What really gets me though, is the fourth page, and how in the very first panel, Vesper and Corrick are looking right out, as if acknowledging the reader/viewer/me. That, and both of them are off center, as well as smaller, compared to before.

...But, hell to it. Who am I to judge? Just...one thing you may want to heed: if you're going to revamp what you've got, save what you can. You didn't get to near TWO THOUSAND views off of nothin', and people cling to the familiar. So...There's really no need to reverse just about every single panel/page. I'm sure people won't mind. Though, I will bet my lucky rubber chicken that you may get an earful about this revamp. Most certainly.

...Yet if you don't though, then feel free to take my lucky rubber chicken and slap me across the face with it, as the laws of the universe must be breaking down. People complain about everything. I know I do...

And to be revealed, huh? Well then...I have a few more questions. How would you describe Vesper and Corrick's personalities at this point? Where did the horse go? And do you like Valkyries?
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:iconhandmade-crown:
The story and the characters are staying the same, and that's what brought most people in.

The fourth page can be changed.

I am fully aware that some people will give a stink; that's what people do (and love to do). But, I cannot find it in myself to continue a project that I am not completely satisfied with, no matter the number of fans. Don't get me wrong, I appreciate each and every one of those people, but it is my comic, my story, and I want to do it as much justice as I possibly can.

How would YOU describe Vesper & Corrick? The horse is still there, just not yet, and on Valkyries, I have not given it much thought, really.
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:iconjinxel:
Pffthahaha! Alright then! I was worried for a moment there that story thus far would be changed, but I'm glad to see that my concerns have been pummeled by, what I'll call, the Iron Knuckles of Reason. Mmhm. My concerns are bleeding all over the floor right now, saying, "Alright alright! I give! But are you sure you don't want to-"

And then they get pummeled again, because they're just that annoying.

Yet, hey, you are right. It's your story, your characters, your art, and your rules. In fact, you rule. And did I say two thousand views? I meant two thousand viewers. Big difference right there, what with the er and all. Yep yep. er. Gotta love that.

Though, how would I describe Vesper and Corrick? Uh, I don't know. Not really sure what fits them um-

Knee. Deep.
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:iconhandmade-crown:
*hands you a cookie* You still rule.
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:iconreverend-jack:
oh hey you changed her gun :) although i dug the mauser, this one is more historically correct.
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